Forever I thought it was ok to switch the point of view all over the place. Stop.
It took me a while to realise it but not only does it make things very confusing for the reader it also confuses you as a writer
For example:
Jen was a nice girl she had those nice girl eyes and a sweet smile
I never thought I was a popular girl, but ever else thinks so
James and I knew each other for a long time. you could say we were friends for life.
See the problem? Not only do you have no idea who is talking but it is confusing on what's going on.
Which brings me to my next point. The Point Of View indication Or POV for short.
I always thought that it was ok to just randomly change the point of view by throwing that in.
Stop.
It's good, but can be over down. If you need that it's ok but you really want to develop a character so we know who is talking.
Now I am not saying that it's bad but I am not saying go throw them around everywhere.
For Example:
Jens POV
Hi, I am Jen.
Narrators POV
Jen never was a very social girl.
Kevin's POV
I like Jen
See the problem? Too much. If you are going to switch the POV. Do it subtlety and not within imediate Sucesion of eachother.
Also Don't change more than 2 or 3 types in a chapter. That usually means you are trying to explain too much.
And a friendly tip before I go: If you are going to write a story where you are constantly switching the POV, Do it every chapter.
You may have to shorten your chapters but it is cleaner and easier to read.
Next: Character Development
