The Reader's POV: Review Book {CLOSED}

Author: Queen_of_life_Heba

Reviewer: Apricity31

Chapters reviewed: 5

Cover:

Your cover links well with the blurb and title, I really like the use (or lack thereof) of colour as it gives your book a mysterious tone. The font used is also easy to read and suits your concept of supernatural and vampires. Only thing is you need the apostrophe in "Dracula's" so it's grammatically correct.

First Impressions:

Aside from a few grammatical errors, I was genuinely intrigued to see what potential your book could hold! In addition to the fact that I don't usually read books of this kind, I really wanted to see what was going to happen so that's good for reeling in readers!

Title:

Your title suits the concept of your story really well! I wouldn't change anything about it as it's not a mouthful and it's not irrelevant to your blurb and cover.

Blurb:

The first part of your blurb is good! Only there doesn't need to be a capital letter on 'Deny' since it's not a noun.

For the second paragraph, you need a few tweaks here and there! I think you're missing the word 'hunters' in your first sentence. This is what you've said:

'Raya is the youngest child and heir of the Van Helsings - a family of the famous vampire.'

This is probably just a typo mistake which is completely normal although you just need to clean that up since it may confuse readers when they read your blurb.

Since the Van Helsings are famous for hunting vampires, I suggest maybe changing the 'a' to a 'the' since they aren't just a regular family- does that make sense? They are the family of famous vampire hunters. So instead of:

'a family of the famous vampire hunters.'

You could try:

'the family of famous vampire hunters.'

Now for the next part of this second paragraph, you've listed the things Raya has been taught to be, although you could make this more dramatic by removing an 'and' so you're not dragging along if that makes sense.

So instead of:

'she is taught to be tough and strong and most importantly - hate vampires, the creatures of the night.'

You could remove the 'and' and switch the wording up a bit to add a little more tension to entice readers:

'she is taught to be tough, strong and, most importantly, to hate the creatures of the night: vampires. '

Now onto the third part of your blurb (sorry for the length of this, a long blurb should have a long review!), you could improve introducing the Count Dracula by saying:

'Vladimir Tepez- better known as Count Dracula- is the leader..'

Since Count Dracula is a more well-known name, you could add a sense of normality by saying his other less known name. So readers think 'oh look a regular interesting male role- wait no it's Count Dracula!' And I personally think this will invest the readers better into your story.

I don't think you really need the next sentence since you've already stated he is the leader of the most powerful vampire clans. Also, after using certain words twice your blurb may start to sound repetitive so here's what I propose: you merge the first, second and third sentence together so the blurb doesn't drag on and also so that you're not just listing all the things that most readers will already know about Count Dracula. (: