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Comment Topic: Picturing an entire scenery through a few sentences, isn't it amazing? Comment on the author's use of imagery to paint the picture in our heads.
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Specified Chapter: Chapter: Opening Scene
Summary Thus Far in Book: N/A
Author's Note: Hello, people of earth. I'm excited to be spotlighted, and eager for you all to begin reviewing TAM—which you can do as bluntly as you wish, as that sort of honest feedback is what helps me improve the most. Feel free to point out anything and everything you can think of that needs improvement. Also, thank you to the organizers of NBR for making this possible!
Question 1) The main character introduced in this chapter is a murderer. Does this make you feel like you wouldn't read on for lack of being able to connect with him?
Question 2) Do you have any suggestions on how to display Victor's madness and multiple personality disorder better? Note that in this chapter his disorder is not meant to be mentioned, just hinted at.
Question 3) This question is for anyone that decides to read past the cutoff point. Does Mia's description of the paranormal world/rumor detectives and Victor's reaction to it seem believable?
Genre: Paranormal
Rating: M (mature). There is violence in this chapter, and some suggestive language. Please note that the rest of the story is rated Mature if you decide to continue reading.
Winning Comment: "PG-13. There is violence in this chapter" I believe the violence and vivid descriptions of gore push this story way beyond PG-13. You do a great job of describing the carnage in close-up detail. So I'm surprised that the NBR team didn't adjust the rating. Maybe I'm out of touch, but I would never allow my thirteen year old girls to read this.
You've written a great starting chapter that jumps right in there. I'm also guessing it will work well for the genre's audience. Even so, it might be worth while to step back and look at the mechanics of it. There are really four parts to this chapter. 1)Introduce the reader to the family, the house, the situation and relationships. 2) Tell the backstory incident of abuse. 3) Have dinner and the murder incident. 4) Introduce Mia into the situation. (Then what ever happened after the cut off)
