Next Big Recognition Contest

NBR MEMBERS! We have a very special announcement to make. Please give a warm welcome to our two newest board members, consciousdreamer1 and mamoritai! They will be our new Informer and Talent Scout, respectively. It's great to have you on board, you two!

Commenting time frame (CST): 10/14 ~ 10/23

Moderator: swiftiegirl1010

Comment Topic: The protagonist's not the only one who gets to shine! Comment on the secondary characters of each author's chapter and their dynamics of the relationships with the main character. If there are no secondary characters, then comment on your first impression of the main character.

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Author #1: PackerBacker2

Book Title: Careful

Specified Chapter: 7: The Fellowship of the Three

Summary Thus Far in Book: Tyler, a harsh personal trainer, continues to train two negligent teenage boys- Derek and Mark- for a fairly lax survival competition called InterSurvive. At first, he harbors an extreme distaste for the two. However, after a trip to the bar one Friday night, he realizes a pathetic truth about one of them...and he feels it's his duty to bring the troubled teen out of his haphazard ways once and for all. Along the way, Tyler himself will make some careless decisions, which will ultimately lead to his downward spiral.

Author's Note: Hi everyone! It's great to be back in the spotlight, and I can't wait to see what you all have to say in regards to this chapter. I'd like to thank everyone for their dedication to give quality feedback every week, as well as those who keep this wonderful place running.

Here's some questions I have:

1. For those of you who have read this previously, how do you feel about the personalities of the characters now(do they stand out more, are they realistic, is there any improvement, etc)? For those of you that are new, how do you feel, generally?

2. Thoughts on the big "revelation" and confrontation? Is it a good twist(for those that have previously read: does it help you to understand Derek's character better) or was it executed poorly? I'd like to know what I can do to improve the revelation, if so.

3. I plan on having Tyler sign up for InterSurvive later on in the story, due to a series of poor decisions as of "recently" in his life. I'd like to know how you as a reader feel about this. Does it make sense, or is it too random at this point(since the first part of the story primarily focuses on him training Derek and Mark for the competition)? Tips on improvement are appreciated, if you think it's too random.

As always, any other comments in regards to the chapter are welcome as well.

In-line Comment Preference: WELCOME

Genre: General fiction/Action

Rating: PG-13(for swearing and implied substance abuse)

Winning Comment:  hello and congrats on the spotlight! First off, I have to say, I read your summary of the book up to now on the NBR page, and your blurb, and I was like, WOW. This is so original and so interesting and I really, really want to read it. Perhaps more than any other book I've seen on 抖阴社区. Like if I was in a bookshop I'd splash out £7 or whatever on it (and I'm a povvo, so that means a lot, lol). And that's a huge achievement, well done. This story and book has huge, huge potential to be amazing. That said, there were things in this chapter that need improving that I'm going to go into here. But I want it to be clear from the off that these are criticisms couched in "I want this book to be amazing as it promises to be", and not "you're a poor writer, give up now". I want you to keep working on this book so I can buy it in a bookshop and push myself over my overdraft limit!!