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Q2: Some terminology has been used incorrectly, I think (tendrils of sun, for one)...although I won't linger too much on this point as quite a few people have already pointed out all these instances.
Also, since your story is set in a medieval-style time period, I would suggest keeping the vocabulary that you use consistent. The final sentence, you use "okay", which is not consistent with the time period that your story appears to be set in. You could be a little more careful with that in the future, methinks. ;)
I would suggest varying your sentence structure, also. I notice that you seem to like using long sentences. This could potentially cause confusion among your readers. So try to use short sentences every once in a while. Convoluted sentences with multiple subjects and actions can end up very very confusing. (For example, the sentence where your mc drops from the tree, takes the arrow and wipes it).
And try not to get too heavy-handed with semi-colons ( ; ). (That was me once upon a time XD). A semi-colon indicates that two complete phrases have been joined together--meaning that they can still stand alone as sentences of their own. So why not make it so, instead of letting the sentence stretch out too long? Of course, I don't ask you to omit them totally. Sometimes it is unavoidable. But reducing them can make your writing look cleaner. Easier to read. And easier to understand.
However, on the whole...I had a pretty good impression of your writing. You have a good enough understanding of the English Language as well as writing as an art form, to be able to write clearly, concisely and without too many errors.
One suggestion, as a fantasy reader/writer.
I'm a little iffy about the interaction between the knight and the mc. Obviously your MC, while rebellious, is presumably a peasant. Lol. And your knight is probably from a good family, as knights are usually from lords' families. Commoners become soldiers. Anyhow, I don't quite sense the arrogance that comes with being nobility, and being above your MC in social standing. (then again, it might just be his personality, but I'm just saying--people brought up in different classes will have different ways of speaking and acting, both among their own class and between other classes. Each class will have a healthy contempt of the other. Only, the upper class will express it more overtly, since, you know, they're upper class and they have more power and prestige.
I may have rambled a little. But I hope this has been of help. XD Have a good day, and best of luck!
